J.C. Belding

What do you mean by "in gold-ish orange"

Okay imagry. You need to adjust your meter a little bit but this poem has good potential. Just work on it a bit and I bet it'll sound a lot ...

I know you heard this before, but great metaphors! Your imagery is also very nice as well.

This is too short for my tastes and quite cliche. Try to make your poem longer, more meaningfull, and more unique. There is lots of potential in it though, and ...

I enjoyed the simplicity of this, but it was quite cliche and rather bland. Try using more extravagant and meaningfull words to liven up your work and add more debth ...

Thanks for the advice. It was immensly helpful, especialy the link.

You have good imagery and there certainly was a good amount of humor and charm in it but it's a bit too akward to leave a lasting impression. Next time ...

Your poems pretty good but you should fix up some grammatical errors. It could also have been written more clearly.

Nice ideas but the entire piece doesn't flow that smoothly. You shoul go back and edits the piece slightly. Your meter is also needs some work, but once this is ...

Good job. You managed to pull off the ryming scheme quite well, considering the size of the poem. The plot was slightly confusing but otherwise, good job! Keep on writing.

The "holy matron" is just a representation for old traditions and beliefs and the poem is centered upon the idea of breaking away from old and possibly foolish customs. It ...

Use more discriptive language. Also, try to be more exciting in your work and add some rymes to make it run smoother. Anyway, okay job.

Thanks for the advice. It was really helpfull.

You did a pretty good job with the ryming and your plot was great. There were a few bumbs and a slight confusion near the end but nothing to get ...

Thanks. I'll get right on those corrections and PM you.